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Some people think that it is important to have a single language as and international official language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify the countries and cause a loss of culture. Discuss both viewpoint and give your opinion.

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task achievement
Enhance the clarity of the introduction by clearly stating both viewpoints rather than focusing solely on supporting evidence for one side. This will help in setting the context for your discussion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph logically flows into the next. For example, transition smoothly between discussing the benefits of a single global language and the potential cultural losses. Using transitional phrases would enhance logical structure.
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Provide more specific examples and evidence to support each point. Expanding on personal experiences or citing studies could strengthen the essay’s arguments.
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You have effectively introduced the significance of languages in fostering intercultural communication, which is pivotal to this topic.
task achievement
The essay attempts to present an opinion supported by reasons, which aligns with the discussion task requirements.
coherence cohesion
Maintaining a formal tone throughout the essay enhances the academic nature of your writing.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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