In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?
In the contemporary world, many cities are designed in a specific
pattren
where Commercial, Residential and Schools Correct your spelling
pattern
are build
in Change the verb form
are built
a designated
Correct the article-noun agreement
designated areas
a designated area
areas
. Use synonyms
This
trend Linking Words
outweight
advantages over disadvantages. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my reasons for Correct your spelling
outweighs
this
belief.
On the one hand, the local municipal councils have Linking Words
markout
different Correct your spelling
marked out
areas
for variant sectors by keeping Use synonyms
further
development in mind for the cities. In many locations around the world, local authorities prefer schools next to the residential Linking Words
areas
, which is convenient for parents to Use synonyms
dropoff
or Correct your spelling
drop off
pickup
. Correct your spelling
pick up
Moreover
, many Linking Words
middle grade
individuals can walk every morning to their school. Add a hyphen
middle-grade
Linking Words
Although
, many Correct word choice
However
officies
and shops are generally constructed away from residential Correct your spelling
offices
areas
as Use synonyms
it
attract traffic and cause accidental Correct pronoun usage
they
hazard
.
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hazards
On the other hand
, many Linking Words
argues
that Change the verb form
argue
people
have Use synonyms
right
to build their offices or shops Correct article usage
the right
according to
their convenience as they Linking Words
paying
property tax every year. Wrong verb form
pay
Eventhough
, some Correct your spelling
Even though
people
Use synonyms
does
not like the planning of the city but they have to follow guidelines. There is one big disadvantage, that old Change the verb form
do
people
face Use synonyms
day-to day
life Correct your spelling
in day-to-day
is
they have to travel Unnecessary verb
apply
long
Add an article
a long
distance
to Fix the agreement mistake
distances
their
work or to buy groceries. They are Correct pronoun usage
apply
very
old that they avoid driving because their eyesight is getting weak. Rephrase
so
Moreover
, local authorities should build convenience shops in Linking Words
a residential
Correct the article-noun agreement
residential areas
a residential area
areas
where they can accommodate young kids and old members of the society Use synonyms
of
their daily needs.
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for
To conclude
, In the modern days cities are well organised and planned Linking Words
according to
their needs. Linking Words
whereas
, it has one drawback that Linking Words
people
have to travel miles to grab stuff Use synonyms
of
their daily convenience.Change preposition
for
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