The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years.

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The pie charts compare the proportion of three types of potentially harmful nutrients, namely

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, saturated fat and added

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in typical meals in the USA. It could be inferred from the graph

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and saturated fat are mainly ingested through having dinner,

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daily snacks

made

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the

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most of the added

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intake in the US. Looking into more details, 43% and 37% of the

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and saturated fat

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absorbed during dinner,

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this

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percentage is only 23% when it comes to snacks. The percentages of

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and harmful fat consumed during lunch are

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similar, with the figures being 29% and 26% respectively.

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contrast

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whereas

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added

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consumption during snacks-eating occupies 42% of the total

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additive

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intake, only 23% and 19% of

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nutrient

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ingested during dinner and lunch. Noticeably, the proportions of all the three elements absorbed through having breakfast share a similar figure,

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accounting for 14%, 16% and 16% of total

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, saturated fat and added.

sugar

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consumption respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

169 words

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