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The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050.

The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050.
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The graph illustrates the data about the proportion of population in 4 domains for 2003 and future years. From an
overall
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 look, it is manifested that there will be increases in
polulation
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population
 figures for some countries
time
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in time
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 ahead, including 2025 and 2050, except for Italy.
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,
while
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 Indonesia may have the largest
inhabitants
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number of inhabitants
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, the opposite may
true
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be true
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 for the case of Italy. Delving into
further
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 detail, it is evident that
initially
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, the number of
Indonesian
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Indonesians
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 dominated the chart, predicted to rise considerably to 274
million
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 by 2025 and eventually maintain its position at 312
million
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 after 25 years. Meanwhile, Argentina, despite having the least citizens at about 34
million
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 within the first
recored
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recorded
record
 year, might be able to take second place after climbing up two times
at the end
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 of the time frame. Concerning the rest, in 2003, the populace of
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea was 48
million
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, followed by the data about 52 people in millions after 22 years, remaining consistent by the end of the period. Notably, there is a stark contrast in
Italia
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the Italia
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 population. It
experinced
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experienced
 a downward trend, starting from a little above half of
billion
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a billion
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 to only 45
million
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 by 2050.
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