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The climograph shows the average temperature and precipitation per month in Kolkata.

The climograph shows the average
temperature
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 and precipitation per month in
Kolkata
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. It could be inferred from the graph that the amount of rainfall from July to September is considerably higher than the remaining months each
year
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.
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Temperature
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The temperature
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 in the city of
Kolkata
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 peaks in May. The highest precipitation could be seen in July in
Kolkata
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, reaching about 340 millimetres,
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 figure is mirrored by that in August. September and June follow, with about 290 and 250 millimetres of rainfall respectively. High temperatures could
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 be observed during these times of the
year
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, fluctuating around 28 to 29 degrees Celsius. From November to February, the city of
Kolkata
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 experiences considerably low precipitation, with a minimum figure of just around 10 millimetres in December each
year
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. Interestingly, December
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 has the lowest
temperature
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 all
year
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 round, just below 20
degree
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degrees
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 Celsius.
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 minimum value, the
temperature
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 starts to climb steadily, reaching its peak in May at around 30
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.

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task achievement
Ensure that all specific data and values are accurate and have clarity in presentation, despite generally accurate reporting remember to check values for precision.
coherence cohesion
It may enhance clarity if you were to include a brief conclusion summarizing the key trends and data points.
task achievement
The essay effectively describes trends and specific points accurately, focusing on the main aspects of the climograph.
coherence cohesion
The body paragraphs are well-structured with a clear focus on rainfall and temperature separately, contributing to overall coherence and cohesion.

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