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The maps bellow show changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st century. Summarize the information by reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. dũng

The maps bellow show changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st century. Summarize the information by reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. dũng
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The maps describe the innovation of Lakeside
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town
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Town
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 in the first 9 years of
21st
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the 21st
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 century.
Overall
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, the
town
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became
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has become
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 more
modernize
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modernised
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, transforming some of
derelic
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the derelic
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area
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areas
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 meanwhile the most industrial
ameilorated
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areas
 for employees have more
opportunity job
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opportunities jobs
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 and accommodate. After that, overcome wasteful land abandonment. In 2000, Lakeside had
resident
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a resident
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area
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,
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a derelic
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derelic
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derelict
derelicts
ware house
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warehouse
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,
desertion
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a desertion
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area
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,
old
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an old
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town
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,
industrial
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an industrial
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 complex and
river
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a river
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 from south to north. To the west, there was
art
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an art
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center
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centre
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 for entertainment and schools for young inhabitants,
industrial
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an industrial
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 complex to the south,
residential
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a residential
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 zone,
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a derelic
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derelic
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derelict
 warehouse and
old
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an old
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town
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 to the northwest. Next 9
year
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years
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, the
town
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 have a new improvement. In
term
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terms
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 of desertion percinct, it is made good
transform
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to transform
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 an abandoned house into a new car park,
the
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and the
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 offices and university
was
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were
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 built from
old
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the old
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town
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.
Then
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,the school was kept intact
while
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 the
inhabitant
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inhabitants
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 collapsed from there to once to the northwest , the first residential
area
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 in the west was put up into a shopping
center
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centre
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 for people,
the
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and the
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 art cinema
change
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changed
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to
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into
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cinema
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a cinema
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.
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 to the south, the occupant and industrial complex merged so that employees
can
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could
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 have both a job and a place to live.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area with synonyms.
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