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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little c can do to improve the situation. So governments and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that only governments and major corporations are in charge of contemporary ecological issues and the masses are not able to change the situation anyhow.
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, I personally believe that
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 statement is not fully accurate, as every single individual can contribute to decreasing anthropogenic impact on nature by participating in environmental volunteering campaigns and by following the 3R rule.
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, participation in volunteer initiatives which are related to ecological problems is a highly valued investment in the process of sustaining the global environment. Apparently, governmental structures are not always capable of coping with some emergencies owing to the lack of personnel, in
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 cases the helping hand offered by concerned citizens is immensely beneficial.
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, recently there was a huge oil split in the Black Sea that damaged marine flora and fauna, but volunteers from all over the country cooperated to prevent
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 ecological disaster.
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, the voluntary rescue
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 has already saved thousands of stricken sea animals in
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 region. Moving on to the next aspect, implementing the 3R rule in
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 life of the citizenry will reduce the workload on the waste management system of the country
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 will diminish the number of
landfill
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landfills
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 and dumps.
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 rule includes three steps – reduce, reuse,
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 that can be useful not only for rational use of sources but
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 in achieving a higher level of ecological awareness and consumption mindfulness. To exemplify, buying products with less packaging or recycling plastic will lessen the amount of non-degradable
wastes
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 per household. In conclusion, there
are
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 no
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 that large organizations and state authorities should be responsible for ecological problems;
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, their actions are not meaningful without the help of average people.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. Consider using more linking phrases to connect ideas.
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Expand on the idea of the 3R rule's global impact for a more comprehensive view.
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Strengthen the conclusion by summarizing the examples provided.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly presents both perspectives, setting the stage for a balanced argument.
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The essay effectively uses examples, such as the oil spill volunteers, to illustrate points.
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Your argument acknowledges the role of individuals, which nuances the discussion beyond just government responsibility.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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