The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Zhaina

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Zhaina
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The line graph below illustrates the
number
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of shop centers which were closed and the new shops during the
7 year
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7-year
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period in one nation.
Overall
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, the
quantity
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number
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of
shop
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shopping
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centres which were closed in
this
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period declined slightly,except, in 2015 we can see the greatest falling
number
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.
While
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,
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apply
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the average
number
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of opening shopping places
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
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a dramatic decrease in
this
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period.
According to
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the information, there are the highest
number
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of stores in 2011 which were opened with the
number
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8,500.
Whereas
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,
that
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the
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number
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of stores dropped in 2012 to 4,000.
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