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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Nurassyl

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The line graph compares the
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
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 of shop
closures
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 and openings between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
Linking Words
,
that
Correct word choice
apply
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the number of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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closures
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 increased between 2012 and 2013. In two
thousand
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fifteen
Add a comma
fifteen,
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 the
closures
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 decreased
at
Change preposition
to
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 nearly one
thousand
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.
However
Linking Words
,
number
Change the article
the number
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 of shop openings increased between 2012 and 2014 at six
thousand
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. The
closures
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 in two
thousand
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 fifteen, around 1000,are is the lowest figure shown on the line graph.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words closures, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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