fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming more popular increasingly. Some feel that this is a positive trend while others do not. what are your opinions on this?

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Nowadays fast
food
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can be found worldwide and its popularity increases rapidly.
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some view
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phenomenon positively, others believe it could have harmful impacts. I, personally, assume using
food
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can be detrimental to
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health
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since it is not healthy and will make
people
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obese.
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with, not only instant
food
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is not nutritious but it can
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be harmful to
body
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.
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to say, processed
food
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is high in trans fats and different types of
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additives that contribute to weight gain and
health
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issues.
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many
people
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these days, see fast
food
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as a quick snack and a convenient option, it seems that storing up fresh produce like apples and eating
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then
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them
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would be a better option. Take Diabetes
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II as an example. It is now evident that eating fast
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can easily
leads
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to
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health
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problem in
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the elderly
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.
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, I believe fast
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consumption must be diminished to maintain body
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.
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,
due to
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eating these types of
food
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, individuals are both having sedentary lifestyles and becoming more overweight. To put it differently, if
people
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get used to
use
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easy-to-eat
food
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, they will eat more portions and become obese. fast foods sometimes seem to be more mouthwatering because of the heavy
smelling
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. And,
people
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are more encouraged to use them.
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of
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that
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people
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will gain much more
wight
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weight
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and choose an unhealthy lifestyle which usually lacks physical activity.
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,
this
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gradually leads
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a vicious cycle jeopardizing their welfare.
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, I believe the rapid increase in fast
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is disadvantageous to
human's
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wellbeing
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well-being
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through
lacking
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of necessary elements for
body
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the body
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and altering our ways of life in a bad way in the long run. Having
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food
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is better to be reduced in our diets. I think, by implementing stricter laws, there is a fair chance to control the consequences of fast
food
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in the near future.
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Present balanced arguments considering both sides of the topic.
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You have articulated a clear position on the topic and maintained it throughout the essay.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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