Differences between countries are becoming less evident. Nowadays, around the world, people can see the same films, fashion, brands, advertisements, and TV channels. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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the constant advancement of technology or

globolization

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globalization

globalisation

making

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culture

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exhange

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exchange

frequently

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which leads these

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people

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are exploring

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familiar

cinemas

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, fashion ,

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commercial

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too. It is believed that

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trends

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has some

drawbaks

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drawbacks

such

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beauty of diversity might going to be

faded

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while

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I believe similarity brings more benefits to both society and

individual

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individuals

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than diversity. Without a doubt ,diversity is one of the most

intrested

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interested

thing

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which is existing

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throughout

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through out

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the

world

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People

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loves

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observing

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different

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culture

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cultures

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while

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travelling as it makes them

surprised

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whereas

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, some

people

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are

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might be not comfortable

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while

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accepting or exploring different cultures around the

world

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as a

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result

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bring

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racial

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hatred

among

public

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without any

reasons

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, in India parents are not allowing to watch western

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to their children as they feel discomfort with wearing of fashion by western celebrities. They think it is against their religious sentiments so they want their youth away from it. On the other side,

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same

intrest

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interest

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cinemas

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between

countries's

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get

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them familiar with the

culture

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which makes communication more frequent and

bring

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down the barrier of hate .

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exhanging

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exchanging

culture

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through

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and fashion

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makes a nation prosperity in terms of economics . To explain it, watching

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same movies and following their

favorute

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favourite

actors allows them to perform live shows

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different countries which generates income for the local public in the form of increased tourism and

soldout

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tickets.

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, a famous singer

taylor swift

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Taylor Swift

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did her

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live concert in

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which

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70 per cent of the audience from all over the

world

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and

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millions of

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income

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for locals and the government.

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, no doubt

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the

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difference between cultures and entertainment makes

people

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secure from being faded of their own

culture

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however

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, exchanging of

culture

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bring

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down the racial

harted

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hatred

and success to the economy of the

world

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Consider fully developing your arguments with clear examples and explanations. Some points appear underdeveloped, such as the reasons diversity might lead to racial hatred.

coherence cohesion

Your essay would benefit from clearer logical connections between your ideas. Transition words and phrases can help guide the reader smoothly from one idea to another.

coherence cohesion

Be consistent in formatting, especially with spacing and punctuation for a more polished presentation.

task achievement

Your essay tackles both sides of the argument, presenting potential disadvantages and advantages of cultural homogenization.

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You provide relevant examples, such as the concert by Taylor Swift, which helps illustrate your points.

coherence cohesion

The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a nice structure to your writing.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

325 words

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