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Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficlult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antartica. What are benefits or disadvantages for tourists visiting such places?

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In
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recent years, Tourism
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 drastically increased in hard locations. Tourists are getting attracted towards uncertain places which may have pros and cons impacts on it.
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 essay is an attempt to introspect both the positive and negative side of it. When taking into consideration the choice of travellers towards rarely visited
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 brings numerous benefits. Among them, one positive impact
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 allows the
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 growth of those regions.
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 would mean that when people start visiting areas which was not frequently visited will help the locals to develop
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 like groceries,
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and convenient
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 stores.
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,
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visit
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 will spread the cultural diversities of different regions.
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, foreigners entering Africa brought some attention towards tribal culture and many NGOs travelled to help
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 development. These are a couple of reasons for tourists visiting difficult terrains.
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, there are disadvantages too. The first downside often experienced is
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 of basic
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 needs, which ultimately makes survival hard. To explain, hard terrains do not have farming and sources for food, which makes
tourist
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to
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starve for food and water. Another repercussion
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 witnessed is in terms of injury and medical facilities. To substantiate with an example, it could be cited that a person
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 Antarctica was lost for
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was struck with
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 injury, he could not find any facilities to treat and
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 to death.
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, it is accepted that hard terrain tourism is a subject that has both positive and negative sides to it. In the future, it is anticipated that
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 trend is likely to continue.

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Try to elaborate more on specific examples and provide more detailed explanations for your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clearer logical progression from one idea to the next, helping the reader easily follow your argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
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You addressed both the benefits and disadvantages of the topic, showing a balanced analysis.
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The essay touches on the potential economic benefits and cultural exchange, offering relevant examples for these points.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extreme tourism
  • Unique experiences
  • Untouched landscapes
  • Environmental awareness
  • Personal growth
  • Physical risks
  • Environmental degradation
  • Carbon footprint
  • Ecological preservation
  • Economic equity
  • Cultural insensitivity
  • Mismanagement of resources
  • Indigenous populations
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