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The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph provides information about the changes in the
price
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 of three different food product groups from 1979 to 2009 and the
overall
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 trend of the consumer
price
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index
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 in
this
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30- year
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30-year
 period.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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price
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prices
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 increased for both three food products despite some fluctuations.
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, just the expense
for
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of
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 fresh fruits and vegetables
was
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significantly increased above the rise in the general consumer-
price
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index
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. All the lines on the graph have the same starting figure at 50 in 1979. Over the period, the consumer
price
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index
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 steadily increased to more than 200 in 2009. The
price
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 for sugar
and
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sweets and carbonated drinks witnessed similar trends.
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, since 1987, they
had
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 been below the consumer
price
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index
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 average. After some minor fluctuations, the number for sugar and sweets was
at
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200 in 2009 higher than that for carbonated drinks at 150. Though fresh fruits and vegetables faced a short period of decrease between 1983 and 1985, the number
for
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of
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this product
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these products
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raised
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 significantly after that. After 30 years, the prices finished at roughly 350 on the
index
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, index with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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