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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organiasation. why might this be case what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed

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At present, increasing numbers of citizens are selecting to be
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freelance, rather than to
work
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 for a company or organization. There are some reasons why
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 may be the case, and there are several potential drawbacks
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 being self-employed. There are several factors that contribute to individuals choosing for self-employment. One primary reason is that it allows people to have
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for
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 their
work
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, If
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are
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 self-employed, they will have control
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 their working hours and where they choose to
work
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, they will have more free time as long as individuals complete their
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 within the timeline. A second reason is to be your own boss,
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, if someone works for a corporation, they will be bound by the rules and values of the company. Sometimes the rules that exist in the company don't match with someone's life principles,
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, being your own boss is a good alternative.
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, being a freelancer
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 has several disadvantages.
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, the first disadvantage of being
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 is the inconsistency of income.
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 is because the salary will be based on the project compared to
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 for an organization where people get a continuous salary.
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, another downside is a responsibility for their
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, self-employed workers need to do multiple tasks
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 as marketing, financing or recruiting at the same time. These responsibilities can be a
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burden for freelancers. Yet, these responsibilities are essential to
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 a successful freelancer. In conclusion, people are
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 to
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an
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entrepreneur
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entrepreneurs
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 because
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it is
 flexible and avoid a hierarchical system.
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, self-employment
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 has some drawbacks,
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 as an unstable income or obligations for their
work
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coherence
To improve coherence, consider using more varied linking phrases and cohesive devices to clearly illustrate the connections between ideas. For instance, between your two main reasons or between your points about responsibilities.
task response
Ensure you explore all aspects of self-employment thoroughly and consider including a counter-argument for a balanced view. This would enhance the depth of your task achievement.
introduction conclusion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your essay nicely.
examples
The examples you used, like being your own boss, add clarity and relevance to your arguments, making your essay more engaging.
task achievement
Your response addresses the task effectively, outlining both reasons for choosing self-employment and potential disadvantages.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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