The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart provides data about the
jobs
in the United Kingdom in the years Use synonyms
of
1998 and 2012.
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Overall
the figure for Linking Words
men
working in full and Use synonyms
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part
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part-time
time
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occuptions
in both years accounted for more than 60% of employment in the UK. Correct your spelling
occupations
occupation
Although
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women
employment number Change noun form
women's
was increasing
from 1988 to 2012, it is still lower than Wrong verb form
increased
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men
.
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men's
According to
the Linking Words
informatoin
shown in the graph, we can notice that the number of Correct your spelling
information
jobs
for Use synonyms
men
as a full Use synonyms
time
were decreasing from 53%, ended up to Use synonyms
be
47% Unnecessary verb
apply
at the end
of the period, Linking Words
while
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men
working as Use synonyms
a
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apply
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part
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part-time
time
increasedUse synonyms
1
% between 1998 and 2012 to Change preposition
by 1
represnts
7%.
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represent
represents
Furthermore
, Linking Words
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the women
women
figure for Change noun form
women's
full
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full-time
time
was increasing from 19% to 26. Use synonyms
In addition
to that Linking Words
while
the Linking Words
full
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full-time
time
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percent
increase, Change the spelling
per cent
women
working in Use synonyms
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part
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part-time
time
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jobs
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on the other hand
decreased, Linking Words
thus
it ended reaching Linking Words
to
20% in the year Change preposition
apply
of
2012.
Based on the Change preposition
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grapgh
, the sum up ofCorrect your spelling
graph
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men's
men
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emplyment
as full Correct your spelling
employment
or
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full-time
time
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jobs
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represnts
almost 65% with Correct your spelling
represents
slight
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a slight
loosning
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loosening
loosing
percents
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percentage
to
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for
women
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,.
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,
.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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women
careers as full Change noun form
women's
time
increasedUse synonyms
7
%, Change preposition
by 7
while
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a
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apply
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part
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part-time
time
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jobs
decreasedUse synonyms
2
% in the year 2012.Change preposition
by 2
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