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The table and chart below. Give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The table and chart below. Give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The illustrated chart and table
provides
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provide
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 insights into the police annual
budget
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 for
years
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the years
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 2017 and 2018 of a particular region in Britain. The table provides information
of
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about
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 the sources and the pie chart
telling
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tells
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 about the division of the
budget
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.the currency is
pound
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a pound
the pound
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 and the numbers in
million
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millions
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. The
Budget
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 includes various sources
such
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National
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as National
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 Government, Local Taxes and Other sources. There has been an increment in the
budget
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 of 2018 which is around 14 million pounds (304.7m in 2017 and 318.6 in 2018).
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 the
budget
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 figures have
raised
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risen
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 by
few
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a few
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millions
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million
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 for 2018. But Local Taxes have increased by 19 million pounds. The money is mostly spent on salaries of the staff and officers,
slightly
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which slightly
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 decreased to 69
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2018 from 75
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per cent
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percent
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 in 2017.
whereas
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 Buildings and transport remain constant at 17
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percent
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per cent
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. The police
have
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apply
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started to spend more on technology in 2018 around 6
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percent
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per cent
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 from the previous year.
Overall
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, the
budget
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 is increasing and mostly
spend
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spent
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 on salaries with
rise
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the rise
a rise
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 in the
spendings
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spending
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 on technology.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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