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The tаblе and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in оnе аrеа of Britain. The tаblе shows where the mоnеу саtе from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tаblе and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in оnе аrеа of Britain. The tаblе shows where the mоnеу саtе from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and pie charts provided information about between 2017 and 2018 of police
budget
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budgets
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 in one area of Britain. The tables present the sources of the funds
while
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 pie charts show where the plan’s money went.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the total
amount
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 of police budget
gradullay
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gradually
 increased, with
national
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the national
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governmet
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government
governments
 being the main funder over the period
of
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apply
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shown
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show
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. If we
looking
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look
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 at the pie charts,
large
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a large
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amount
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 of the plans
spent
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are spent
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to
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on
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 the salaries of the officers and staff
as well as
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minimum
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the minimum
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amount
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 used for technology. In 2017,
total
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the total
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amount
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 of
financial
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the financial
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 plan was 304.7m but
then
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 a
slightly increased
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slight increase
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 reached 318.6m
at the end
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 of the period.
Furthermore
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,
National
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the National
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governmet
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government
 was the major funder in 2017 with 175.5m, afterwards
this
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 value increased by 2.3m and maintained its level over the
priod
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period
 of 1 year. Compared to
National
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the National
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 government and other sources(eg grants), local taxes showed big growth from 91.2m to 102.3m respectively.
However
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, other sources(eg grants)
demonstraded
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demonstrated
 minimal development and arrived at 38.5m in 2018.
Subsequently
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, Salaries of the officers and staff
was
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were
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 spent
primarilly
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primarily
, despite marginally
declined
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declining
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 from 75% to 69% over the period.
On the other hand
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, Building and transport remained stable at the same level
while
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 Technology rose by 6%
along
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with
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apply
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came to 14%
although
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 it was the category where the least
amount
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 of money was funded.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • funding sources
  • income
  • distribution
  • allocation
  • government grants
  • local taxes
  • expenses
  • operational costs
  • administration
  • community programs
  • salaries
  • law enforcement
  • financial trends
  • comparative analysis
  • implications
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