Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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as work environment and safety. Many believe that the top priority should be a handsome salary,
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Develop a clear and comprehensive thesis statement outlining your stance on the topic.
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Ensure that your essay addresses all parts of the question, and provide detailed supporting reasons and examples for your arguments.
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Make sure to include a conclusion that effectively summarizes your points and reaffirms your position.
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Work on using a more logical and clear paragraph structure throughout your essay to make your arguments more cohesive.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly outlines the topic and presents your viewpoint, providing a strong start to your essay.
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Your writing reflects an understanding of different dimensions of job satisfaction beyond just salary, which adds depth to your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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