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The graph below shows the availability of various sweeteners in the USA from 1966 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the availability of various sweeteners in the USA from 1966 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below provides data
of
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 the variety of
sweeteners
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 in America from 1996 to 2012.
Overall
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, refined cane and beet sugar
domained
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dominated
 the market, followed by corn
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 and honey. Looking in more detail
the
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 dates from 1966 to 1986, refined cane and beet sugars had the largest market share, accounting for around 100
pounds
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 per
person
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 (PPP), which considerably decreased until about 60
pounds
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person
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 in 1986.
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 to that, corn
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 started with less than 20
pounds
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person
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 and dramatically rose to about 70 in 1986. Honey and edible syrups represented less than 20
pounds
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person
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 in the time given. From 1966 to 1986, refined cane and beet sugars did not
fluctuated
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 much,
representating
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representing
 around 60
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 per
person
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 until 2006, and slightly increasing until 2011 with
aroun
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around
 70
pounds
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person
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.
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, corn
sweeteners
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 were growing significantly and started to fall in 2006, with around 70
pounds
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 per
person
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 and it ended up with 60
pounds
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person
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 in 2011. Following the previous years, honey and edible syrup remained
with
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 less than 20
pounds
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 per
person
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 until 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweeteners, pounds, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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