The pie chart illustrates the average fees for households in Japan and Malaysia in 2010.

The pie chart illustrates the average fees for households in Japan and Malaysia in 2010.
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The pie chart illustrates the average fees for households in Japan and Malaysia in 2010.
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, the expense of health care was the smallest in both countries. In Japan, other goods and services
costed
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the most
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Malaysia, it was housing. In 2010, other goods and services were spent the most by Japanese households at 29%. Following was the figure for housing at 21%. The proportion for transport and food was at 20% and 24%, respectively. Japanese families paid the least for health care at 6%. In Malaysia, housing took the largest proportion of 34%
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expenditures. Other goods and services were the second
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Malaysians
spend
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the
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at 26%. The figure for food and transport was
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27% and 10%, respectively. Health was spent the least by Malaysian families, at 3%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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