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The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The layouts represent the changing of
infrustructure
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infrastructure
 to stop vehicles
entering
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from entering
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old
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the old
an old
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town
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in
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of
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 Bormouth's
town
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.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the layouts have been rebuilt in some areas.
Additionally
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, it is worth noting
to notice
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apply
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in the south of
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area
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the area
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 constructed. In the past, as we can see, the map has only four main areas in
old
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the old
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town
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. The west
of
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apply
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layout had
road
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a road
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 entrance to
old
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the old
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town
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, which connected with
main
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the main
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 road to visit it.
Therefore
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, many
vehicels
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vehicles
 could
entry
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enter
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which
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with
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thier
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their
 own cars through the main bridge in the
west
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western
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area
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. Nowadays, the infrastructure in
this
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town
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have
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has
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 been improved.
Firstly
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, visiting
old
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the old
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town
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 must be by foot with the cars could be put in parking areas.
Additionally
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, there
have
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are
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 two car
park
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parks
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 located in the west
area
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 of
old
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the old
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town
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 and the east
area
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 of the
town
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, which follow the main road through the bridge.
Interstingly
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Interestingly
, in the
cross bridge
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cross-bridge
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 of
east
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the east
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area
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have
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has
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 been built a supermarket. It is worth
highlight
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highlighting
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 the old
town
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 existing
the
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in the
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area
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 for
visitor
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visitors
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 to enjoy the river in the cafes and restaurants.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • pedestrian-only zones
  • environmentally friendly
  • landscaping
  • public transport system
  • vehicular movement
  • central area
  • tourists
  • eco-friendly
  • cycling paths
  • health-conscious
  • attractive
  • residents
  • visitors
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