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Production levels of the main fuels in the UK between 1981 and 2000

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The graph below shows the
production
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 levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. The line
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chart
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 provides key information about
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the
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the main kinds of
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guys
 in the United States
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and Britin
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Britin
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Britain
 between 1981 and 2000. The units are measured in
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million
 tonnes.
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, it is clear from the graph that there was
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dec rease
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decrease
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 in the the
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 levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. of petroleum from 1996 to 2000.
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, the
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 of
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Natural
gas
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 was
declain
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decline
prodacted
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protected
produced
 in 1983.
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 the
producted
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production
 of petroleum has,
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 still higher than those of other
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products
 of
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 .
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 what is
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,
product
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a product
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 of Coal
gas
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 began
at
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in 1981. it
reachad
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reached
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a apeak
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apeak
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peak
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 of nearly at 1983, and the minimal
producted
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produced
at
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in
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 1984.
Afterward
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, it gradually declined to Coal
gas
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 by 1999. In terms of junction
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product
 of Coal
gas
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 and Natural
gas
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 at 1991 by 60 tonnes and junction at the least at 1984.
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task achievement
Provide an overview that clearly summarizes the main trends and changes shown in the graph. Currently, the overview is not complete and lacks clarity.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by organizing the essay into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a separate point or comparison.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases, such as 'however,' 'in addition,' or 'on the other hand,' to help guide the reader through your arguments and comparisons.
task achievement
Include specific data points and examples from the graph to support your descriptions and comparisons. This can strengthen your analysis.
task achievement
The writer attempts to compare different types of fuel production.
task achievement
The attempt to provide an overall trend shows an understanding of the task's requirements.
task achievement
Some basic trends, such as the decline of petroleum and coal, are noted, which shows engagement with the graph.

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