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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differetn countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differetn countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given lines and chart show us global
water
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 usage in various sectors and
water
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 intake in two separate nations.
Overall
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, the amount of used
water
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 is continuously increasing through the years, in different fields.
Instead
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 of the information about worldwide, there is some data about
water
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 in Brazil and Congo. The
water
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 utilization in agriculture had been growing
steady
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 from 1900 to 2000. Since 1950, industrial and domestic
water
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 use
was
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has increased
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 slightly
risen
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apply
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and there was no data before 1950, the reason
of
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that is
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 industry started to grow in
1950s
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the 1950s
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. In Brazil, the
water
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 management was approximately 176 million in 2000.
On the other hand
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, the same information was about 5.2 million in Congo. The
water
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 consumption in Brazil was around 33 times more than in
Democratic
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the Democratic
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 Republic of Congo.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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