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the maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the comparison between Islip town
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centre
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centre's
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 current situation and the future development plans. It appears that there are significant differences and small portions of similarities in either map.
Overall
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, there are major changes seen
on
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in
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 the upper
shops
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 area, the different
function
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functions
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 of the main
road
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,
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of housing and
its
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their
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 placement, and the development type of paved
road
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.
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, the bottom
shops
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 are still the same without any changes. Turning to the upper
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shops
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shop's
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 sites, there will be growth and expansion for the bus station, shopping
centre
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, car park, shopping
centre
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, and
the
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apply
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new housing throughout
this
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 section.
Additionally
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, compared to the current maps, the type of
road
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also
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 seems to be more complex. It will add a dual carriageway around the city
centre
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 and switch the current main
road
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 to pedestrian space. The current housing only takes two sites in the south of the map,
meanwhile
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 they are creating another two housing spots for future development. Other than that, the school apparently increases in size but the park’s size seems to be reduced. Only the bottom
shops
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 that still have the same function and placement left no differences.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, shops, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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