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The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017.
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The given chart reveals the
number
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 of adults in different major sports in one area, in a period of
time
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 between 1997 and 2017.
Overall
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, all of the indexes of
people
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 participating in the major sports were facing fluctuations, except for swimming, the
number
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 of adults in
this
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 category did not change at all during
this
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 period of
time
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.
The tennis
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Tennis
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 was the most popular sport in both 1997 and 2017. The
number
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 of
people
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 in golf, swimming, football and rugby in 1997
were
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was
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 almost equal, being around
of
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apply
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thirty.
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,
by
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with
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 the passing of
time
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such
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 a situation changed to the index of
people
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 in golf and swimming, and football and rugby being almost equal after 20 years. The
number
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 of
people
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 in basketball and cricket
were
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was
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 not
same
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the same
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 in both 1997 and 2017, varying significantly in those
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time lines
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timelines
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, from being around ten and
twenty five
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twenty-five
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 in 1997, and twenty and five in two thousand seventeen, respectively.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, time, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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