The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901

The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901
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The above chart shows the data about
silk producing
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silk-producing
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factories and the
number
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of employees of both genders in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. The highest and lowest amount of factories was in 1861 and 1851,
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for 761 and 272 respectively. The first 10 years of producing silk were beneficial, nearly 500 mills were opened and the total
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of employees peaked
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decade, making up 130 750.
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the table, we can see that there are more male workers than female, and that the quantity of them decreases slightly during
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the time
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period. The highest
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of workers for both genders was in 1851, even to around 54000 and 77000 respectively for women and men, and the lowest was in 1901. Despite the difference of probably 10-20 thousand workers between males and females, the lowest difference was in 1891,
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year their quantity was nearly the same. It is noticeable that after a rapid rise in 1851, the
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of plants was fluctuating,
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however
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the government of England and Wales tried to reduce the
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of
work places
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without losing the benefit from silk production.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Industrial expansion
  • Manufacturing hub
  • Technological innovation
  • Economic contribution
  • Productivity enhancement
  • Global market dynamics
  • Urbanization
  • Workforce demographics
  • Production scale
  • Social implications
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