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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.
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The table gives information about the statical data on temporary employers in four
countries
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 between 2003 and 2006,
while
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 insight into trends of labour mobility in
the
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2006.
Overall
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, the increase
in
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could be seen
all
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in all
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countries
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,
while
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 the
quantity
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number
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 of workers in
United
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the United
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kingdom
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was
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apply
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doubled in
this
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 period. The table may highlight disparities in the concentration of temporary migrant workers per 1,000
community
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communities
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 in 2006, allowing for a
comporative
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comparative
 analysis amongst the
countries
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. Discussing the potential consequences of
high
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a high
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 or low ratio of
temoirary
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temporary
 migrant workers in terms of economic impact, cultural integration, and social services in the host
countries
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Temporary migrant workers
  • Labor mobility
  • Statistical data
  • Insights
  • Trends
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Economic growth
  • Demand for labor
  • Immigration policies
  • Disparities
  • Concentration
  • Comparative analysis
  • Consequences
  • Economic impact
  • Cultural integration
  • Social services
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