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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Both
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 graphs illustrate a comparison in the relationship status of two countries which are Canada and
Australia
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 charts show that most residents get separated without getting a divorce, and the lowest status is the divorced couples. Other statuses are almost similar. Looking into more detail, approximately half of the Australian population have a stable marriage
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, when it comes to Canadians only 29 per
cent
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 are still married. In
contrat
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contrast
 to
Australia
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 gay marriages appear in the Canadian chart with
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3 per
cent
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 of the total percentage. In
both
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 Canada and
Australia
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 getting a divorce is not a very common option. Most people tend to get separated without going through the divorce process as the two graphs illustrate 53 and 41 per
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 respectively.
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the number of Canadian divorced couples is half the number of the ones in
Australia
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. One more similarity is the percentage of
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single and widowed
residence
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 as
its
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 below 10 per
cent
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 in
both
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 counties.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words both, australia, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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