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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table depicts
an
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the
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 income of
police
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the police
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budget
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while
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 charged
illustrates
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and illustrates
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 an outcome
how
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of how
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 money was spent
per
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apply
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2017 in
2018
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and 2018
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 in
the
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apply
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certain
area
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areas
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 of Britain.
Overall
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, it is explicit that the main source of
budget
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 comes from
National
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the National
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 Government in both years, as
like
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apply
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the salaries for officers and
stuff
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staff
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is
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are
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 the high data from
chart
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the chart
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.
Firstly
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, it is shown that income
come
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comes
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 from National Government and grants experienced a slow climb
for
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of
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 approximately 2% and half per cent, respectively, reaching a point of 177.8
million
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 and 38.5
million
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. Meanwhile, local taxes increased highly, from 91.2
million
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202.3
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to 202.3
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million
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 reaching a total
budget
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for
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of
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 380.6
million
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 in 2018.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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spendage
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spending
for
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on
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 salaries for workers stood constantly on the top with a little decrease, from 2017 and 2018, from 75 to 69%.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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 money spent
to
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on
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technologies
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technology
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have
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has
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 experienced a climb
for
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of
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 6%, reaching 14%
at
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in
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 2018. At the time,
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budget
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a budget
the budget
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 that was used for buildings and transport stood at
the
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apply
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17% in both years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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