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“Many university students live with families while others live away from home bcause their universities are in different places.” What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations?

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Introduction
Im a
universtiy
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university
 student dont
want
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want to
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 live with my
families
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family
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 because very
advantage
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advantageous
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 for me
live
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to live
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 away from my
families
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family
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home
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 but has so
much
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many
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disadvatages
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disadvantages
disadvantage
. I
wite
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write
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 about 3 advantages and disadvantages.
Body paragraph 1
I think has the best 3
advatages
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advantages
.
First
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The first
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advatages
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advantages
advantage
living
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of living
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 alone
very
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is very
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 relaexed
than
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to
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family
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a family
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 house cause
focused
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focus
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studying
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on studying
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 and
nobady
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nobody
 bothers
yours
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you
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. Second I'm
invated
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invited
firends
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friends
 my
home
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 very comfortable
hang
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hanging
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 out in
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home
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the home
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 with
firends
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friends
.
Other
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Another
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advatages
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advantages
has
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are having
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 a
home
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 close to school because
usullay familu
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usually family
home
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fair
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close
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 to
university
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the university
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 and very
esay
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easy
 to
going
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go
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 to
scholl
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school
 and has a like
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this
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apply
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others
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other
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 advantages.
Body paragraph 2
In my
views
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view
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first
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the first
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disadantages
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disadvantage
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home
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of home
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 rent
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is bceause
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bceause
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because
 very big
isues
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issues
 the
financal
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financial
 nearly all
money
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the money
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 spend
for
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on
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the
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apply
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home
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 rent.
Others
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Other
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 problems cooking
to
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apply
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food if you don't
konw
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know
 how to do it cooking always order food, not eating healthy food and
spend
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spending
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 so much money for
this
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.
Last
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problems
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problem
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 cleaning and washing
cholthes
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clothes
 not
has
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have
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a
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apply
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time
for
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to
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 do it
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this
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apply
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bcause
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because
everyday
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every day
show examples
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they gointo
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gointo
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go to
school
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in school
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 and
study
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studies
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.
Conclusion
Overview, If you
finance
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have finances
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avilable
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available
 the
live
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living
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 away from
home
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very
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is very
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 good
to be
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for being
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adult
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an adult
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persone
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person
persons
 but
this
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 is very expensive and maybe
isues
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issues
for
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with
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 mental
helthy
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health
healthy
. Living with
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a familiy
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familiy
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family
 house
very
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is very
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 good for
famliy
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family
reoletions
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reunions
 and not expensive, easier than
live
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living
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 alone but has so
much
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many
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isues
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issues
.
I'm
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I
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 chose live away from
home
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 because feal
adult
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an adult
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 and learn to how
the
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apply
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live alone
preapering
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preparing
 for
over
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apply
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universty
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university
 life and work life.

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coherence cohesion
Try to use complete sentences, and ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea. Consider using transition words to improve the logical flow, such as "firstly", "moreover", and "on the other hand".
coherence cohesion
Include an introduction that presents the topic and a conclusion that summarises the main points. This will provide a better structure to your essay.
task achievement
Address both advantages and disadvantages equally. You can include a small overview of each in the introduction and provide examples that are more specific in the body paragraphs.
task achievement
Explain your ideas with more depth. For example, why living closer to the university is beneficial, or what kind of financial management methods could help with rent.
task achievement
You have identified key advantages such as a more relaxed study environment and being close to the university.
task achievement
You provided personal insights about the benefits and challenges of living away from home, showing a personal connection to the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • save money
  • high rent
  • food and bills
  • lower stress
  • focus on study
  • daily support
  • family care
  • close to home
  • old friends
  • family rules
  • less freedom
  • quiet place
  • independent
  • by themselves
  • manage money
  • make choices
  • campus life
  • join clubs
  • social ties
  • high cost
  • homesickness
  • loneliness
  • heavy problem
  • first months
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