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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Introduction
In
this
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 contemporary world, people
are tend
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 to be busy
due to
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the
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their
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 hectic
lifestyle
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. It is an
indespensable
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indispensable
 to take a break from the frantic life. It is argued that the superior method of being relaxed is to stay alone. I totally agree with the statement as it reduces the stress level and feel free from the thoughts of other human beings. I will elucidate the reasons behind
this
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 phenomenon in the following paragraphs.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, spending time alone allows individuals to focus on their personal skills and
self- awareness
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self-awareness
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.
For instance
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,
according to
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 a survey conducted by Forbes Magazine is that 80.05% of
population
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 is stuck in
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the rat
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 race and
do
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does
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 not have any awareness
to
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of
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 their skills.
Consequently
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, it assists them
to identify
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in identifying
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 the
sorces
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sources
source
 of stress and addressing
effectively
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them effectively
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.
Moreover
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, being alone can
also
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 provide a break from social pressures and expectations.
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, it allows one to decompress and
rejunvate
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rejuvenate
 in a way that may not be possible when in the company of others.
Body paragraph 2
Furthermore
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, solitary activities
such
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 as reading, meditating or taking a walk can be calming and relaxing which results in offering a distraction from daily stresses. To exemplify,
according to
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a
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research, people who practice meditation and walk regularly are mostly calm and active in their lives.
Therefore
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, it can foster
individuls
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individuals
 to stay focused towards their goals and function really well.
In addition
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, personal space and
solitute
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solitude
 can
also
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 enhance creativity and
problem solving
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 which offers
introspective
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an introspective
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enviroment
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environment
 to think through challenges without outside influence.
Conclusion
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, it is essential to become tranquil in life to keep themselves physically and mentally active. It
also
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 affects
on
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healthy
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, if a person is going through depression
so
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it is conducive for him to practice yoga,
reading
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read
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 books and exercise regularly.

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There is an effort to provide a thoughtful discussion about the benefits of solitude for stress relief.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • solitude
  • introspection
  • self-reflection
  • decompress
  • rejuvenate
  • social pressures
  • solitary activities
  • meditation
  • calming
  • creative space
  • mental well-being
  • stressors
  • unwind
  • personal space
  • therapeutic
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