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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The map above provides information on the development of a village close to London named Chorleywood.
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it is clear that
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 the establishments in the village have developed over the years 1868 to 1994. To start with, there are 3 different roads available to use based on it is function. The first
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 is the Main Road, which has two different directions.
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 the next
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 is the Railway, which was built in 1909. The
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 built in 1970 is the
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one
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 called the Motorway. In terms of
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, there are four different kinds. It was all started in 1868 with the small area adjacent to the Main Road.
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 in 1883, the lower
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 were expanded
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. Soon after in 1922, It broadened it is way to the
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 on both sides.
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, following the construction of the Motorway in 1970, the village has again expanded to the East side, creating 5 different
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • population growth
  • expansion
  • residential areas
  • commercial areas
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • steady increase
  • gradual expansion
  • significant growth
  • emerging trends
  • urbanization
  • rural village
  • town planning
  • residential development
  • economic development
  • transportation network
  • community services
  • public facilities
  • amenities
  • demographic changes
  • land use
  • housing
  • businesses
  • education
  • healthcare
  • recreational areas
  • social implications
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