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The chart below gives information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the price fluctuations of
airplane
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 tickets over two
weeks
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 for flights between Sydney and Melbourne in 2013, with data for
both
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 directions.
Overall
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, it is evident that
ticket
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prices
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 increased sharply on weekends, particularly from Fridays to Mondays,
while
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prices
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 remained relatively stable during the weekdays (Tuesdays to Thursdays). In more detail, the
ticket
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prices
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 for Sydney to Melbourne showed a similar pattern across the two
weeks
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. On Monday,
Week
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 1 started at $80, which was significantly higher than $50 in
Week
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 2. From Tuesday to Thursday,
prices
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 stabilized at $35 before rising to $75 on Friday. The price peaked on Saturday at $80 in
Week
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 1 and $70 in
Week
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 2 before declining steadily to $50 on Sunday. For Melbourne to Sydney, the trends were comparable, with the most notable differences observed on Monday and Friday. In
Week
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 1, the
ticket
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 price dropped from $60 on Monday to $40 in
Week
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 2. From Tuesday to Thursday,
prices
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 remained constant at $35 in
both
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weeks
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.
However
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, on Friday,
Week
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 1
ticket
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prices
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 peaked at $80,
whereas
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Week
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 2 showed a smaller increase to $60.
Prices
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then
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 gradually declined to $50 on Sunday for
both
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weeks
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. In conclusion, the data highlight that
ticket
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prices
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 were typically higher at the start and end of the
week
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, with significant increases on weekends. Despite some differences between the two
weeks
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, the
overall
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 trends were consistent for
both
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 directions.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words weeks, both, ticket, prices, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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