Practice: You will be graduating from university and would like to invite your family to the ceremony. Write a letter of invitation to your parents. In the letter: - Explain that you have completed your studies - Give details of the event, including time, date and dress code - Let them know how many tickets they have and who they are for

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Hi Mom and Dad, I will be

graudating

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graduating

from university by

end

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the end

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of March and

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would like to invite you folks to my graduation ceremony. I have completed my studies and it was not easy as everyone in the class mentioned. Luckily, with the help of my seniors, they were willing to guide me through the troubles that

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had faced in various topics of the subject.

Furthermore

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have attached the details of my graduation ceremony in the letter. The time of

the

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apply

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event will begin at 10 in the morning

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16th

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the 16th

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of March. Formal attires are mandatory, failing to do so will result

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deny

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of entry. I have reserved several tickets for the family to enter the ceremony. The tickets are your seat numbers and you guys will be seated at the front row to speculate me. Looking forward to

see

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everyone there. Sincerely, Kim

Submitted by kimtatt.tan97 on Mon Jan 13 2025

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coherence and cohesion

Ensure paragraphs are clearly separated by using blank lines to enhance readability.

task achievement

Include more specific information in your response, such as mentioning how many tickets are available for the event.

coherence and cohesion

The greeting and closing are warm and appropriate for a letter to family.

task achievement

The writing tone is friendly and suitable for addressing family members.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

150 words

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