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> The maps below show the centre of a small town calles Islip as it is now, and the plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. >

> The maps below show the centre of a small town calles Islip as it is now, and the plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. >
#maps #show #centre #town #calles #islip #plans #development #summarise #information #features #comparisons
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The maps above illustrate differences in the
town
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centre
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 of a little
town
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 named Islip currently and in the future. To start with, the
town
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centre
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 now
is consisted
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consists
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 of a school,
wide
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a wide
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 housing
area
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, a
park
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, shops, the main road, and a
countryside
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area
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. The biggest one is the housing
area
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, with a school underneath on the left, and a
park
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 adjacent to the East. Above the housing is a shopping
area
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,
splitted
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split
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 by the main road.
While
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, in the
northest
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northern
area
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, a wide
countryside
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 is present extending from West to East.
However
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, in the future, the structure
would
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will
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 be more complex.
While
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 the school, shops, and
park
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stays
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stay
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on
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in
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 the same place, there are two new housing
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area
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areas
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 inside the dual carriageway. Adjacent
on
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to
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 the North
to
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of
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 the shopping
area
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 is the
pedestrians only
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pedestrians-only
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area
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, with a bus station, shopping
centre
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, and a car
park
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on
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apply
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the
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apply
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above. The
countryside
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 is now gone.
Overall
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, some parts of the
town
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centre
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 will
remains
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remain
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 the same, with a few features
in addition
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,
such
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 as
a
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apply
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new housing,
bus
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a bus
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 station,
shopping
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a shopping
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centre
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, and
lastly
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 a car
park
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.
On the contrary
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, one of the
feature
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features
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 is
also
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 gone,
in particular
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, the
countryside
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre, area, park, countryside with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • maps
  • centre of a small town
  • development
  • current
  • planned
  • features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • summary
  • information
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