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The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart and the table above present the occupation of anthropology graduates from one university and their range of
salary
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.
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, the chart and the table prove that the anthropology graduates are occupied variously. In terms of destination, full-time
work
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 is dominating,
while
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 part-time accompanied by post-graduate study remains the least.
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,
a
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salary
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 of these occupations is distinguishable. The majority are employed in
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the
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government
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sector
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 with an income above $100.000.
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, the lowest are detained by freelance
consultants
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 and some in the
government
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sector
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 with a
salary
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 below $50.000
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, there are 6 different destinations for the anthropology graduates. As I have mentioned, full-time
work
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 is the highest at 52 per
cent
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, followed by part-time
work
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 at 15 per
cent
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,
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unemployed at 12 per
cent
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,
a
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full-time postgraduate study at 8 per
cent
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, and
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a
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part-time
work
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 accompanied by post-graduate study at 5 per
cent
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.
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, there are 3 types of employment in 4 various ranges of salaries. Most are occupied in the
government
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sector
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 with more than $100.000 as a
salary
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. Followed by freelance
consultants
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 who are paid more than $100.000 and
in
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between $74.000 and $100.000 at 40 per
cent
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. The same
salary
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 happens to some in the
government
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sector
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 as well at 30 per
cent
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. Detained by an employee of private companies is a
salary
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 of $50.000-$74.999 at 35 per
cent
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.
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, the same
salary
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 is found for freelance
consultants
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 and
government
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 sectors at 15%. The three lowest are paid $25.000-$49.999 in private companies at 10 per
cent
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, and in
government
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sector
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 and freelance
consultants
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 at
both
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5 per
cent
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, work, government, sector, consultants, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • undergraduate degree
  • graduate career paths
  • full-time employment
  • part-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment rate
  • career advancement
  • industry-specific roles
  • traditional employment
  • salary distribution
  • career progression
  • earning potential
  • workforce entry
  • industry demand
  • specialization
  • experience
  • salary brackets
  • sector variations
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