The chart below shows the places in which UK people gained access to the internet from 1990 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places in which UK people gained access to the internet from 1990 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates
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the location
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location
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locations
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to
connect
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apply
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the
internet
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that British can go to from 1998 to 2004 respectively home, work, college, and library.
Overall
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, home is the most common place where users can access the
internet
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while
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library
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the library
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only
account
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for a very small percentage of the given data. First of all, home is one of the top choices for using the
internet
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, peaking at approximately 60% in 2004
although
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the data decreased the most over the years but not significantly
at the end
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of the 20th century with nearly 50%.
Next,
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in the job, the
percent
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percentage
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of British who used
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internet
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the internet
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has
downward
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a downward
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trend and the lowest point for
this
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space was in 2004 when only 10% of people logged on.
Similarly
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, the university has regressed slightly when accounted for 20% of visitors for 3 years until 2004, it dropped to about 3%.
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, the location
gets
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that gets
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least
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the least
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attention
was
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is
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the library and the numbers here
is
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are
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lower than
other
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in other
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places. The highest was in 2000 when only nearly 20% of people use the
internet
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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