The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The Brick Manufacturing Process

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The Brick Manufacturing Process
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The graphic illustrates the life process of the silkworm and the phases in the manufacturing of silk material.  
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, man-made ,
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process. It begins with clay,water and sand added as raw materials and
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results in bricks being delivered. First of all , an excavator digs out clay from the ground and places it on
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grid where it passes over a rolling machine in order to separate out small and big pieces. After that , sand and water are added and
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is either added to a mould or cut by a write to produce bricks. Following that , they are placed in an oven so that they can dry and are
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exposed to two different stages of heat in turn between 200-980 degrees Celsius in the first stage and 870-1300 degrees Celsius in the second . From
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, the bricks are cooled in a cooling chamber for two to three days before they are
packeged
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packaged
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placed on a truck so that they can be transported.
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