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The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the British
students
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' monthly expenditure within 2016 (units are measured in
pounds
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 sterlings). The bar chart presents data on where the student's
income
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 came from the same year (units measured in per cent).
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, almost half of
students
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' expenditure was on rent
while
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 the least amount of
money
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 was spent on travelling. Meanwhile, a significant portion of
students
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'
income
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 was received from student loans,
whereas
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 scholarships were the smallest source of
incoms
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income
incomes
. A significant majority of the spent
money
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 was related to
students
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' accommodations (385
pounds
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). At the same time, categories
such
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 as bills, socialising, travel and the other took no more than
a
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apply
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100
pounds
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 each. Another significant
money
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 spent was on food (124
pounds
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). In terms of sources of
students
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'
income
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, slightly over 80% was from student loans,
then
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 slightly less
money
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 (no more than 70%) was received from relatives and earned
while
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 working part-time. Above 40% of earnings came from savings and deposits,
whereas
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 the lowest percentage of
income
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 was from grants and funding.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, pounds, income, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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