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The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks.These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks.These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts above illustrate the percentage
for
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of
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 three different nutrients consumed in
a
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the
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 daily intake of an average person in the United
States
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 each meal and
snacks
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snack
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.
Overall
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, the charts imply that most people in the United
States
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 are most likely to consume
sodium
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 and saturated fat during dinner.
Whereas
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, added
sugar
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 is received during snacks. In terms of breakfast, the chart shows that those who live in the United
States
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 are unlikely to consume
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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.
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, during lunch, they received 29 per
cent
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 of
sodium
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, 26 per
cent
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 of saturated fat, and 19 per
cent
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 of added
sugar
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.
Therefore
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, dinner held the biggest number at 43 per
cent
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 of
sodium
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, 37 per
cent
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 of saturated fat, and 23 per
cent
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 of added
sugar
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.
However
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, the chart for added
sugar
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 shows a different result. It
states
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 that most individuals consume added
sugar
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 the most in their daily snacks.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words states, sodium, sugar, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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