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The two maps below show an island, after and before the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, after and before the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate differences
of
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after and before the construction of some tourist facilities
in
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on
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 an
island
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 Before the construction, the
island
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 was surrounded by sea.
In addition
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, there was a little palm tree.
Moreover
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, a beach was located by
west
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the west
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.
However
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, people couldn’t swim there. The
island
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 didn’t have anything that visitors could entertain. After the development, there are many
the
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accommodation
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accommodations
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 which link each other.
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,
restaurant
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the restaurant
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 is sited
to
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north of
reception
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the reception
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 which is constructed new.
While
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 palm trees still remain on the
island
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, the pier and swimming field
is
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are being
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 constructed.
As a result
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, many tourists can swim and sail the sea.
Finally
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,
footpath
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a footpath
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 and vehicle track are constructed.
Consequently
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, visitors will feel more comfortable than past.
Overall
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, changes
of
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in
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 the
island
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 make people more interested and offer convenient facilities. These factors attract more people to the
island
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • before and after
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • natural features
  • network of cottages
  • footpaths
  • recreational areas
  • pristine environment
  • organized lodging facilities
  • strategically positioned
  • delineated pathways
  • untouched nature
  • accessibility
  • isolated island experience
  • enhanced transportation options
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