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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustrated graph provides the indicators of world
energy
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 origins during 4
year
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4-year
 period.
This
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 information is measured in
watt hours
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watt-hours
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. ​Looking at an
overall
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strukcture
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structure
, it is obvious that all of the sources are observed
and
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as
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 an increase not a reduction. The amount of wind and solar
energy
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 sources
is
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has
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 registered a sharp growth,
while
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 the
quantitiy
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quantity
 of others is observed a moderate and slight increase.
Initially
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, we should note that the indicator of wind
energy
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source
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sources
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 has risen almost double
276
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-534 from 2009 to 2012. The most striking difference is observed in solar
energy
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 with 21-104 watt hours. When it comes to the amount of hydraulic and bio-mass
energy
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 is
constituted
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apply
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a moderate increase
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of
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3329-3663,
246
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and 246
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-326, respectively.
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, the figure of geothermal
energy
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source
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sources
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is accounted
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accounts
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more
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 or less 3 watt hours (67-70).

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable sources
  • Electricity production
  • Significant growth/decline
  • Yearly basis
  • Specific figures
  • Stagnated
  • Regional differences
  • Anomalies
  • Unexpected trends
  • Implications
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