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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide CO2 emission per person in United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison for relevant

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide CO2 emission per person in United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison for relevant
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The line graph demonstrates
average
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the average
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 carbon dioxide CO2
emission
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 for individuals in four European countries from the
year
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 1967 till 2007. The data are plotted in metric
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, Italy and Portugal
has
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increase
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increased
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 in CO2
emission
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for
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per
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 person
on the other hand
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 UK and Sweden
has
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have
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experience
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of
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all in CO2
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emission
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emissions
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. Portugal had
lowest
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the lowest
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 CO2
emission
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 in the
year
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 1967 with around 1 and half metric
tonnes
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. After
that
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 it showed a positive trend through the
year
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 till 2007.
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, Italy was
the
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another
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other
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 country with a CO2
emission
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 of
a round
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around
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 4.1 metric
tonnes
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 in 1967
and
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which
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 slowly
goes
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went
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 up to almost 8 metric
tonnes
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 in the
year
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 2007.
Furthermore
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,
UK
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the UK
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 had the highest CO2
emission
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 in the
year
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 1967 with around 11 metric
tonnes
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 for individuals. After
that
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 it experienced a continuous decline in CO2 and reached
to
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almost 8 metric
tonnes
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of emission
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emission
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emissions
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 per person in the
year
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 2007.
Moreover
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, Sweden was the second highest CO2 emitting country in the
year
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 1967 with around 8.5 metric
tonnes
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, reached the peak in 1977 with almost 11 metric tons and experienced a sharp decline of 6.5 metric tons in 1987.
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 to
this
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, it continued to decline and reached
to
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around 4.8 metric tons in the
year
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 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, emission, year, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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