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The chart below shows the expenditure of two counties on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two counties on consumer goods in 2010.
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The bar graph demonstrates the spending of France and
UK
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the UK
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 on consumer goods in 2010. It is obvious that
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 waste on cars
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 both countries was the highest indication,
opposite
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the opposite
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 for perfume .Costs of France and
UK
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the UK
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 had sharp changes on all consumer goods, except for computers.
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, in France, the highest expenditure was on cars, which was equal to 400,000 £, and following that, computers come in second with an estimated cost of £380,000. Regarding the
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 one, cameras constituted the
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minimum
 proportion of spending. As for
UK
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the UK
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, cars
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 accounted for the maximum percentage with roughly £450,000 outlay.
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, the second largest spending category was books, totalling £400,000.
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 cameras and computers point out more or less the same amount, perfume was observed as the least
preffered
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preferred
 section of all.
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