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The tables give information about the average hours worked by part-time and full-time men and women in three countries in Europe in 2002 and compare them with the European countries.

The table illustrates the knowledge about the medium time worked by males and females part-time and full-time respectively in Greece, Netherlands and
UK
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the UK
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 in 2002
equate
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compared
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 with
Europian
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European
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 countries.
Overall
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, it is apparent that
the
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apply
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Greece showed considerable
result
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results
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 throughout the given
perios
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period
 preventing European countries.
Additionally
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,a slightly similar pattern can be seen in Greece,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and
UK
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the UK
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,to
clerify
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clarify
number of
employe
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employees
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 weather for full-time and part-time are
same
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the same
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.
To begin
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 with, as many women worked
for
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apply
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full-time as men in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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,
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however
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however,
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 the number of
part time
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part-time
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 workers
are
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apply
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declined to
approxiamately
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approximately
 29.
Furthermore
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, the lowest point
is
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in
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 UK par-time is 28 and 29, women and men respectively.
On the other hand
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,
in contrast
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 with european average the
europe
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Europe
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 in 2002
is
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was
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 lower.
Moreover
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,
it is clear that
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 not as many hours work for part-time as full-time
at
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in
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 all regions.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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