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The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.

The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.
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The bar chart provides data about the average growth in domestic products in rich
countries
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,
countries
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 that have adopted a global approach to business and have not.
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, it can be clearly seen that the highest amount was
Globalisers
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 in 1990,
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 the lowest level of
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non-
globalisers
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 in 1980. In 1960, in Wealthy
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, about 4.8% of people used domestic products,
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 the
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 were just under 2.0%.
Non-globalised
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 percentage was just over 2.0%. In 1970, the highest percentage was from Non-globalists about 3.3%,
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 the
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 and wealthy
countries
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 were the similar levels about 2,7% and 2,8% approximately. In 1980, In
Globalisers
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 around 3.4% of people used domestic products. In wealthy
countries
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, it was around 2.2%. Non-
globalisers
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 had the lowest number just under 1.0%. In 1990, the highest number was
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 around 4.9%,
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 the average was wealthy
countries
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 at 2.0%. The smallest number was Non-
globalisers
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 just over 1.0%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, globalisers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • affluent nations
  • global business orientation
  • sustained growth
  • investment in technology
  • skilled labor
  • fluctuations
  • global trade
  • vulnerability
  • global market shifts
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • reliance on local markets
  • limited exposure
  • economic downturns
  • implications
  • economic policies
  • strategies
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