19.Goverments investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Goverments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that public funds should be allocated solely to
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as arts.
However
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, I acknowledge that
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,
such
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as public transportation, healthcare and infrastructures are
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domain
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of government investment, but I
also
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believe that
art
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should
be come
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in
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attention
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of nations as it helps to
well-being
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of societies. On
one
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hand, in my point of view, authorities should invest the major proportion of public money
on
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following
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three
area
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.
Firstly
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, public
transportations
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including
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, metro and trains ,
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can be a solution for both air pollution and traffic congestion in metropolises.
by
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investment
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in eco-friendly public
transportations
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,
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governmena
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can address
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environment conservation,
as
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healthy planet
srve
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bether
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to its inhabitants.
Secondly
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,
healthcare
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domain
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should not only include public hospitals and health education systems but
also
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promoting
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the
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modern
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and treatments.
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, infrastructures
such
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as new roads, bridges,
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constructions
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is the other essential
area
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for public funding.
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, I think governments should pay
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for promoting the arts
such
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as music, theatre and
art
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fairs and encourage their nations to contribute
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trend. From
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of some people, investment in
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is a waste of public money. They believe, governments should neglect the extra
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programmes
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,
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there is a
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in
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. I personally
,
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disagree with the notion of
this
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group, since I think
art
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helps people to
metigate
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their emotional
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as anxiety,
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and stress. In
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world
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helps society’s well-being
while
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offers
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a balanced nations
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, I think
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can offer some part of
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art
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events’ cost
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another portion of expensive offers by volunteers. In conclusion,
although
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allocating
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public funds to
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public
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plays
the
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crucial
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in gaining the
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of most folks, governments should
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some part of public funds
on
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art
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domain, as it helps in increasing the mental health of societies.

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Ensure to revise and refine the language and grammar in your essay. Pay attention to sentence structure and word choice to make your writing clearer and more precise.
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The essay provides a clear opinion on the topic, offering a balanced view on government investment in arts and public services.
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Both sides of the argument are addressed, giving the essay a well-rounded discussion.
coherence cohesion
The essay is structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, enhancing readability and coherence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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