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The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts above
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 the satisfaction levels of undergraduates and postgraduates about their school library's
range
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 of
books
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 and non-printed
materials
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.
Overall
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, most undergraduates are very satisfied with the
range
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 of
books
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 and non-printed
materials
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 provided in their school library.
However
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, those undergoing postgraduate
degree
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 are mostly unsatisfied with both
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range
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the range
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 of
books
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 and non-printed
materials
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.
To begin
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 with, the number of undergraduates extremely satisfied with non-printed
materials
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 holds the biggest percentage at 68 per
cent
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.
Similar
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 thing happens with the
range
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 of
books
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 at 37 per
cent
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.
Then
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, it is followed by those who are normally satisfied at 20 per
cent
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 and 35 per
cent
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. Those who are not satisfied hold the lowest percentage at 28 per
cent
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 for
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range
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a range
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 of
books
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 and 12 per
cent
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 for non-printed
materials
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.
On the other hand
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, the postgraduates are seemingly not satisfied. Not good is the majority in the pie charts of postgraduate at 50 per
cent
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 for
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range
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a range
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 of
books
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 and 62 per
cent
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 for hardcopy
materials
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. Continued with satisfaction for hardcopy
datas
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data
 at 22 per
cent
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, making it the same amount with very good in
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range
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a range
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 of
books
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.
Finally
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, the lowest amount goes to very good for non-printed
materials
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 at 12 per
cent
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words range, books, materials, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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