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Band 5.5

Some countries have introduced laws to limit working hours for employees. Why are these laws introduced? Do you think they are a positive or negative development?

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Some nations have introduced rules for
employees
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 to limit the
hours
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 of their
working
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. I think these
laws
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 are introduced because many
employees
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 are forced to
work
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 for a long
time
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, and I believe
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 is a positive development because it
make
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 the
employees
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 more productive. These
laws
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 are
intruduced
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introduced
 to prevent
the
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employers from letting their
workers
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to
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work
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 for longer
hours
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.
This
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 is because some
companies
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 force
employees
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 to
work
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 more
hours
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 than they should without any return.
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 has a negative effect on
employees
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 because working for long
houre
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hours
make
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makes
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 them less productive and leads them to suffer from health issues which has a huge effect on the company's
success
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.
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, many
companies
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 in China
puts
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 rooms for
employees
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 to nap and introduced
laws
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 that 5 pm is the end of the
work
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. The introduction of these
laws
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 has a
postive
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positive
 impact on
employees
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 and the place where they
work
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in
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.
This
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 is because
workers
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 have no extra
time
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 to
work
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in
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and
this
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 helps them to leave
work
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 at the instructed
time
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 to live their lives away from
work
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 and sleep early at night which
increase
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increases
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thier
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their
 productivity when
theey
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they
work
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 the next day and
this
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 has an impact on the company because the
success
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 of
workers
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determine
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determines
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 the
success
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 of the company.
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, in Saudi Arabia,
workers
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 in successful
companies
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such
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 as Sabic only
work
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 for 6
hours
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. In conclusion, many countries
began put
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laws
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for
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on
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employees
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employees'
employee's
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 working
hours
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 because many
companies
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 force
workers
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 to spend more
time
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in
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on
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 the job
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then
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than
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 required and
this
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 has a
benificial
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beneficial
 impact on
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workers
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workers'
worker's
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 productivity and the
success
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 of employers.

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coherence cohesion
You have effectively introduced and concluded your argument, which is crucial for maintaining a logical flow. However, consider refining the consistency in your argument's development to enhance clarity.
task achievement
While you have addressed the task effectively, some parts can be elaborated further, particularly regarding the examples, which need to be more specific and detailed.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear conclusion that ties back to the arguments made in the body paragraphs, effectively summarizing the key points.
task achievement
You clearly and comprehensively present the main ideas, showing a good understanding of the topic.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Burnout
  • 2. Work-life balance
  • 3. Productivity
  • 4. Diminishing returns
  • 5. Ethical responsibility
  • 6. Exploitation
  • 7. Fair labor practices
  • 8. Chronic illnesses
  • 9. Job creation
  • 10. Unemployment rates
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