The graph below gives information on the number of participants for five different activities (Basketball, Swimming, Mathematics, Biology, and Chess) from 2000 to 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the number of participants for five different activities (Basketball, Swimming, Mathematics, Biology, and Chess) from 2000 to 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows the data about the
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various activities in the period between 2000 and 2020. It is evident that the constantly the most preferable direction is basketball, with the average quantity accounting for 85, and the less popular hobby is mathematics.
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the table, the tendency of the
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basketball
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fluctuated a little between 80 people in 2000, and 90 in 2020. The second activity by popularity is swimming. In 2000, it had a peak of its preferability,a slight decline until 2010, a small rise making up 42 participants and a sharp decrease right after. The graph of the biology direction is quite similar to the basketball sector,
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, two times less spread. The most fluctuating hobby is chess.
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the graph we see, that generally its
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of participants increased a lot, from 10 to 30 humans,
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, had two falls in prevalence and a peak in 2015, accounting for 50 members. Mathematics, despite the
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of people from 2000 to 2005
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to zero,
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the tendency has been rising only until it reached the quantity of 35 members. In conclusion, all the activities faced changes, mostly beneficial, indeed after certain obstacles in the period of 20 years.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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